Write an active scene (a dinner, a romance, an adventure) from the first person POV of no more than 500 words. Now take the exact same scene and write it again from the omniscient POV, entirely from scratch and without looking at the first version. Submit both scenes, and further, please comment on what changes you discover as you shift from one POV (I am telling the story...) to the other (the all-seeing creator tells the story...).
I saw him arrive. I was at my porch playing Pokemon Go on my cellphone. I knew what he was coming. He parked his car in front of my house and from the back seat take a bag. I imagined that he was going to buy my out. All dress in black and with the face sad as can be.
—How are you Eliphas?
He only said my complete name when he needs something or want something. I decided to stand up and go to the front of the house.
—I am not going to do it Ruben and you know it.
—My friend Please at least let me speak out my mind, before you take a decision.
—My decision is final, and you need to know it.
I knew he was going to bride me or warning me.
—She died last night.
—We all know this was going to happen. She has been in bed for the past two weeks.
—Bring her!
—I do not know what you are suggesting.
—You know
—You will lose something that you carry and once is out of you. You are never going to be the same.
—I wanted to say goodbye.
—Just a goodbye will be. Please bring me something that smells like her, a record of her voice and an image. The rest I will be manage it.
I knew this was a terrible decision, but I was in a position where I could not say no to a friend.
—Arrive after the sun goes down. I want to have the sky full of stars. I am going to explain something to you. The lines between this and the other are fragile but strong. They work between weights and exchanges. I am going to offer something of yours and they will let you see her one more time.
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He was a young adult 23, I think. From a long dynasty of shaman people. He was a normal guy; he had a desk job and like to take care of plants at his porch and back garden. If you go on a Wednesday to his house, most surely, he will be just starting at the grass growing.
He decided that calling death people and all type of things related are not something so fun at the end. A friend of his arrive on a Sunday morning at his house. The look on the friend’s face was just that of sadness after losing a loved one. He came to ask our young Shaman Eliphas to bring her mother back.
Our dear shaman did want to help his old friend Ruben but knew the consequences of his actions. See when a Shaman bring a people back from a second or days. You need to give something to the universe. I like to call it a proof of love. You are going to forget something that you love from your loved one. It is like a tactic from universe in case someone wants to constantly be calling their loved ones back.
Eliphas neglected the request from Ruben, but Ruben was able to convince him at the end.
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